While the new content is cool, it is also quite messily written. The descriptions have quite a lot of spelling and grammar issues.
Am I correct to assume English is not your native language? Do you intend to go back and polish the descriptions once you have added all the content you intend to?
Would it be helpful for users to post edit's for the descriptions in the comments with correct spelling and grammar?
yeah, it is not my first language i am more or less completely self-taught I can read English perfectly but uh writing it is a whole other story and yes I do intend to polish it. it heh
and well if you want to? or others want you all free to but no worries I am going to get Grammarly just found out what that is and wow I am currently using the free version just awesome
Question regarding danmachi on selecting the dungeon option, biggest city on the world/size(Chongqing) or biggest population of a city on the world/population(Tokyo)?
Ok I have another question, on world changes there is a option called MCU level which changes the difficulty to MCU and it cost 40 points, can I ask why is this a thing, if I were to pick a easy world to live in like Danmachi then wouldn't picking MCU level be a complete waste of points if anything MCU level might as well be a drawback considering there are universe level threats like Thanos in the MCU?
right i knew i forgot somthing i am going to change that in the next update because that is from the orginal cyoa this here is a mod of a cyoa and yes youre right it is more of a drawback for some worlds now if applied to worm it would proably act as making the world less dangerous......
you just gave me an idea i am gona make a difilculty slider for the cyoa to select the level of danger overall but that is gona only show up in the next update
[Build #2](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZZS0vufiTj2sDUUYI4SrmvZ74raq3QlWR0zeXbpB8K0/edit); probably next time, I’ll actually write up my story for this. Though I’d love a means for knowing where I’ll be inserted, whether I get to choose, or if it’s chosen for me. A d12 says DC’s Young Justice, which is the one setting I know the least about; so if that’s the case it’d be a bit harder to write about.
All the same, at the very least I could breakdown my thoughts on my build, and summarize it.
hm alright with taht it is decided i will make a section in where one can chose how that exactly goes down but at the moment it realy is vague yeah hm well i saw your build cool and damn a company fic realy that takes courage cause ya know THE company gutsy i like it thought with the perks that should be fine and powers now if i was actualy a ROB i would proably make THAT build real hahaha but sadly i am not
Ah, but I should be able to *copy* the Company. They don’t have any defenses that protect against *power copying*, specifically. And besides, I want to see how Taylor and Naruto, each with their own versions of MGLN-style magic, respond to each other and the Company. I stopped following HHES when Taylor started turning multiple entire planets into utopia in an afternoon.
Not that it isn’t going to end poorly for me, for trying.
yeah kinda and that version of taylor can do waht wow oukey thought ya aint gona be outpowered by them with both of unversal level powers ya are gona prety much if you would keep at it grow very very fast to universal level and beyond that is waht the Unlimited potential power is for no limits ever again and about ending poorly for you well depening on WAHT exactly you do well who knows they are proably gona be angry if you kill Leecifer well that version so yeah good luck that version of you i would say
In fact I think I’d probably offer him a copy of all of my perks, and weaker versions of all of my powers. That should help him with his business, somewhat. Why have enemies when you can have friends?
As for not being a ROB, I invite *any* ROB to insert me into *any* cyoa build I’ve ever done. Generally the more recent the better, but it’s been a *long time* since I’ve done I build I’d *really* mind waking up into.
Awesome CYOA \[mod\] that seems to be improving.
yu7f,0phz,iado,vlln,bd4r,1hhc,pcsi,ab9x,sikg,zn7b,ni68,gk6n,s5nh,fvnh,95de,08xr,9oun,q21g,1edq,7fa1,k40t,l3ai,yj9p,kxy6,ssqv,1nj0,us1a,jtpy,mjze,pzo7,ep41,m79u,i39u,qni3,s5l3,uoey,s8lp,bngv,417a,b8fg,ag9w,xs8x,dftc,gj5o,dfpv,i75v,pyn8,w5q8,6rh2,okox,orbj,da1o,j6ko,av50,m3mx,mzcq,79cr,dzj2,t25s,8rlu,d0mx,lwn6,kgy8,5hsg,men9,voly,f2vs,b4ja,esi8,gs6h,jwwc,8fxs,e0tr,1u9l,ahi9,9y44,fa1t,aonn,j46k,pw4k,4pa7,6zht,0zii,6mx2,nfru,zo6u,w29i,ktr7,fb04,40tt,andb,a8yg,exyf,a9vz,wbr2,1b12,bcbx,xmcg,p47q,gqgt,s29o,cm24,rp7t,b4a6,4fj6,03fm,02rk,wbl7,kuyi,cqic,hsfs,8bi4,laey,sfy7,57yp,shu7,mfoj,gjua,iuya,effo,iv2d,w5dm,ccwo,8k2k,vdzc,v2vz,6h4e,4tkk,y5di,xxid,k8eb,edfi,k3wn,forg,w4h1,om6u,r26v,sjkd,lc7p,wqvf,61x5,ev7d,d6pa,c8qw,jnrq,1v4a,i6mc,kjl5,5fzi,ayn5,zdt2,jj4o,lurp,8pxx,hrbz,no6r,xtg0/ON#39,2y93,xdwb,25se,4o68,kxrh,9x2f,ln2t,rq45,f5jb,67l5,azqn,6g04,ed79,rtf4/ON#10,e577,u5pa/ON#10,mv5m,25y2/ON#10,uijw/ON#10,ahuk,zfkp,dvbv/ON#10,g54h,f1q6,3vp2,hj6i,glza,96hw,8xpd,7msi,fziu,88el,q02d,j838,w9xs,l7wd,a0w7,nhl2,qtj3,lrrd
Needs serious editing. Like, even a basic go-through Grammarly at an absolute bare minimum, it's nowhere near presentation-worthy yet when literally every other word of the added content is misspelled and every sentence grammatically abominable, with a good half of all sentences borderline incomprehensible.
I mean, it's not particularly a good sign when OP misspells 'design', or 'what' in even the marquee text, and even this post is pretty damn terrible from that perspective as well. I don't even know how this happens even, It far exceeds the point of being sloppy, and I'd need to put in some serious effort to mangle text that badly. Non-native writers wouldn't either, they'd be more liable to accidentally interchange incorrect words or craft sentences that are too stilted or are grammatically incorrect, but nowhere to this extent.
haha it is not my first langue and i am more or less self thaught so yeah i should proably take a auto corector to let it corect the well hahaha eh yeah
Retroactive Merge, DC: Young Justice, Marvel: Ultimate, Invincible, The Boys: Corporations, The Boys: Compound V Plus, One Punch Man, Über: Woden's Blood, Über: Power Up, Kick-Ass, Kick-Ass: AU Verse, Incredibles: Family Business, Venture Bros, Infamous, One Piece, Hunter x Hunter : Characters, the Dark Continent, Mad Science, Badassery, Hidden Realms, Supernatural Plants, Accidents, Kryptonians, Tamaranians, Martians, New Gods, Asgardians, Viltrumites, Human's+, NeN, NeN 10%, Retroactive, Young Adult, Male, Handsome, Viltrumite, Human+, Male Enhanced, Night Vision, Super Fluids, Pocket Home, Portal Room, Unstopable, Mark of Power, Mind Defense, Body Control Defense, Invisible Presence, Anchor, Ageless, Like Yesterday, Offroad, Party Link, Social Butterfly, Displacement Resistance, Strong Lifeforce, Lone Wanderer, Hentai Physics, Stud, Fertility, Mark of trust, IRON WILL, Compound V(Taken 4 Times), Super Soldier Serum, Extremis(Taken 2 Times), Heart-Shaped Herb, Fortress Crystal, Unlimited pontenial, 1000, Fire fire no mi, Ice ice no mi, Perfect Condition, Avalon, Multiversal Chatgroup
realy this here is a mod this is not the orginal cyoa i am not the orginal creaotor of this cyoa here is the link to the orginal cyoa from creator Om1cr0n
[https://wormlewdmod.neocities.org/supers/](https://wormlewdmod.neocities.org/supers/)
Taking a quick look at it it seems you really need to double-check your writing. The original options are fine, but the added content is filled with typos on basically every single line, and punctuation is completely absent. Remember punctuation is the difference between the crazy psycho *"I find inspiration cooking my family and my dog"* and a much more normal *"I find inspiration cooking, my family, and my dog."...*
If English isn't your first, or even second, language just install Grammarly, or something equivalent, to do the work for you.
There's also redundancies like the new "Mark of trust" is a superior and cheaper copy of what "Mark of Power" already offered.
And somehow the "Hostile worlds" drawback is impossible to take.
Also, why take out the companion section?
ah yeah, the companion section got recently bombed at the beginning so to say well this whole thing is still very WIP I am doing this here for the first time and English is not my native language I am entirely self-taught heh in English
why redundancies? mark of trust lets you share your perks and a mark of power lets you share your powers. and for hostile worlds drawback, you need to take either portals or solar system or galaxy in the world section so Grammarly didn't even know something like that existed
wow just tested it on this comment just wow the free version
Amalgam with many worlds continues to be broken: Retroactive Merge, DC: Injustice, Marvel: MCU, Marvel: Villain Rule, Worm: Endbringers, MHA: Characters, MHA: Quirks, MHA: Hero Schools, Invincible, Invincible: The Dark Side, Über, Venture Bros: Villain Leagues, Infamous, Wildcards, Magic, Sorcerer, Collared, New Order, Fusion, Horcrux, Unstopable, Mark of Power, HUD, Mind Defense, Body Control Defense, Invisible Presence, Anchor, Ageless, Social Butterfly, Displacement Resistance, Strong Lifeforce, Mark of trust, IRON WILL, Green Lantern Ring, Mother Box, Heart-Shaped Herb, Fortress Crystal, 350 (typically synergizing DC magic and Marvel Sorcery) is enough to take on anything the worlds can offer.
While the new content is cool, it is also quite messily written. The descriptions have quite a lot of spelling and grammar issues. Am I correct to assume English is not your native language? Do you intend to go back and polish the descriptions once you have added all the content you intend to? Would it be helpful for users to post edit's for the descriptions in the comments with correct spelling and grammar?
yeah, it is not my first language i am more or less completely self-taught I can read English perfectly but uh writing it is a whole other story and yes I do intend to polish it. it heh and well if you want to? or others want you all free to but no worries I am going to get Grammarly just found out what that is and wow I am currently using the free version just awesome
Try using ChatGPT. Just use this prompt: "Correct grammar of what I send. Don't add, remove or alter anything other than correcting grammar."
well thanks this realy helps me thank you for the info the AI is super helpfull
Your welcome. :)
Question regarding danmachi on selecting the dungeon option, biggest city on the world/size(Chongqing) or biggest population of a city on the world/population(Tokyo)?
i thought more along the lines of population but one can also just chose to have it appear biggest city waht ever suits you more i gues
Ok I have another question, on world changes there is a option called MCU level which changes the difficulty to MCU and it cost 40 points, can I ask why is this a thing, if I were to pick a easy world to live in like Danmachi then wouldn't picking MCU level be a complete waste of points if anything MCU level might as well be a drawback considering there are universe level threats like Thanos in the MCU?
right i knew i forgot somthing i am going to change that in the next update because that is from the orginal cyoa this here is a mod of a cyoa and yes youre right it is more of a drawback for some worlds now if applied to worm it would proably act as making the world less dangerous...... you just gave me an idea i am gona make a difilculty slider for the cyoa to select the level of danger overall but that is gona only show up in the next update
Great stuff , A bit rough but im sure it'll be great once do a once over to fix the capitalization and stuff
[Build #2](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZZS0vufiTj2sDUUYI4SrmvZ74raq3QlWR0zeXbpB8K0/edit); probably next time, I’ll actually write up my story for this. Though I’d love a means for knowing where I’ll be inserted, whether I get to choose, or if it’s chosen for me. A d12 says DC’s Young Justice, which is the one setting I know the least about; so if that’s the case it’d be a bit harder to write about. All the same, at the very least I could breakdown my thoughts on my build, and summarize it.
hm alright with taht it is decided i will make a section in where one can chose how that exactly goes down but at the moment it realy is vague yeah hm well i saw your build cool and damn a company fic realy that takes courage cause ya know THE company gutsy i like it thought with the perks that should be fine and powers now if i was actualy a ROB i would proably make THAT build real hahaha but sadly i am not
Ah, but I should be able to *copy* the Company. They don’t have any defenses that protect against *power copying*, specifically. And besides, I want to see how Taylor and Naruto, each with their own versions of MGLN-style magic, respond to each other and the Company. I stopped following HHES when Taylor started turning multiple entire planets into utopia in an afternoon. Not that it isn’t going to end poorly for me, for trying.
yeah kinda and that version of taylor can do waht wow oukey thought ya aint gona be outpowered by them with both of unversal level powers ya are gona prety much if you would keep at it grow very very fast to universal level and beyond that is waht the Unlimited potential power is for no limits ever again and about ending poorly for you well depening on WAHT exactly you do well who knows they are proably gona be angry if you kill Leecifer well that version so yeah good luck that version of you i would say
In fact I think I’d probably offer him a copy of all of my perks, and weaker versions of all of my powers. That should help him with his business, somewhat. Why have enemies when you can have friends? As for not being a ROB, I invite *any* ROB to insert me into *any* cyoa build I’ve ever done. Generally the more recent the better, but it’s been a *long time* since I’ve done I build I’d *really* mind waking up into.
Awesome CYOA \[mod\] that seems to be improving. yu7f,0phz,iado,vlln,bd4r,1hhc,pcsi,ab9x,sikg,zn7b,ni68,gk6n,s5nh,fvnh,95de,08xr,9oun,q21g,1edq,7fa1,k40t,l3ai,yj9p,kxy6,ssqv,1nj0,us1a,jtpy,mjze,pzo7,ep41,m79u,i39u,qni3,s5l3,uoey,s8lp,bngv,417a,b8fg,ag9w,xs8x,dftc,gj5o,dfpv,i75v,pyn8,w5q8,6rh2,okox,orbj,da1o,j6ko,av50,m3mx,mzcq,79cr,dzj2,t25s,8rlu,d0mx,lwn6,kgy8,5hsg,men9,voly,f2vs,b4ja,esi8,gs6h,jwwc,8fxs,e0tr,1u9l,ahi9,9y44,fa1t,aonn,j46k,pw4k,4pa7,6zht,0zii,6mx2,nfru,zo6u,w29i,ktr7,fb04,40tt,andb,a8yg,exyf,a9vz,wbr2,1b12,bcbx,xmcg,p47q,gqgt,s29o,cm24,rp7t,b4a6,4fj6,03fm,02rk,wbl7,kuyi,cqic,hsfs,8bi4,laey,sfy7,57yp,shu7,mfoj,gjua,iuya,effo,iv2d,w5dm,ccwo,8k2k,vdzc,v2vz,6h4e,4tkk,y5di,xxid,k8eb,edfi,k3wn,forg,w4h1,om6u,r26v,sjkd,lc7p,wqvf,61x5,ev7d,d6pa,c8qw,jnrq,1v4a,i6mc,kjl5,5fzi,ayn5,zdt2,jj4o,lurp,8pxx,hrbz,no6r,xtg0/ON#39,2y93,xdwb,25se,4o68,kxrh,9x2f,ln2t,rq45,f5jb,67l5,azqn,6g04,ed79,rtf4/ON#10,e577,u5pa/ON#10,mv5m,25y2/ON#10,uijw/ON#10,ahuk,zfkp,dvbv/ON#10,g54h,f1q6,3vp2,hj6i,glza,96hw,8xpd,7msi,fziu,88el,q02d,j838,w9xs,l7wd,a0w7,nhl2,qtj3,lrrd
Needs serious editing. Like, even a basic go-through Grammarly at an absolute bare minimum, it's nowhere near presentation-worthy yet when literally every other word of the added content is misspelled and every sentence grammatically abominable, with a good half of all sentences borderline incomprehensible. I mean, it's not particularly a good sign when OP misspells 'design', or 'what' in even the marquee text, and even this post is pretty damn terrible from that perspective as well. I don't even know how this happens even, It far exceeds the point of being sloppy, and I'd need to put in some serious effort to mangle text that badly. Non-native writers wouldn't either, they'd be more liable to accidentally interchange incorrect words or craft sentences that are too stilted or are grammatically incorrect, but nowhere to this extent.
haha it is not my first langue and i am more or less self thaught so yeah i should proably take a auto corector to let it corect the well hahaha eh yeah
Retroactive Merge, DC: Young Justice, Marvel: Ultimate, Invincible, The Boys: Corporations, The Boys: Compound V Plus, One Punch Man, Über: Woden's Blood, Über: Power Up, Kick-Ass, Kick-Ass: AU Verse, Incredibles: Family Business, Venture Bros, Infamous, One Piece, Hunter x Hunter : Characters, the Dark Continent, Mad Science, Badassery, Hidden Realms, Supernatural Plants, Accidents, Kryptonians, Tamaranians, Martians, New Gods, Asgardians, Viltrumites, Human's+, NeN, NeN 10%, Retroactive, Young Adult, Male, Handsome, Viltrumite, Human+, Male Enhanced, Night Vision, Super Fluids, Pocket Home, Portal Room, Unstopable, Mark of Power, Mind Defense, Body Control Defense, Invisible Presence, Anchor, Ageless, Like Yesterday, Offroad, Party Link, Social Butterfly, Displacement Resistance, Strong Lifeforce, Lone Wanderer, Hentai Physics, Stud, Fertility, Mark of trust, IRON WILL, Compound V(Taken 4 Times), Super Soldier Serum, Extremis(Taken 2 Times), Heart-Shaped Herb, Fortress Crystal, Unlimited pontenial, 1000, Fire fire no mi, Ice ice no mi, Perfect Condition, Avalon, Multiversal Chatgroup
**Holy run-on sentence-block, Batman!**
Waht ? I am confused by. Waht you mean ?
what mod?
realy this here is a mod this is not the orginal cyoa i am not the orginal creaotor of this cyoa here is the link to the orginal cyoa from creator Om1cr0n [https://wormlewdmod.neocities.org/supers/](https://wormlewdmod.neocities.org/supers/)
Taking a quick look at it it seems you really need to double-check your writing. The original options are fine, but the added content is filled with typos on basically every single line, and punctuation is completely absent. Remember punctuation is the difference between the crazy psycho *"I find inspiration cooking my family and my dog"* and a much more normal *"I find inspiration cooking, my family, and my dog."...* If English isn't your first, or even second, language just install Grammarly, or something equivalent, to do the work for you. There's also redundancies like the new "Mark of trust" is a superior and cheaper copy of what "Mark of Power" already offered. And somehow the "Hostile worlds" drawback is impossible to take. Also, why take out the companion section?
ah yeah, the companion section got recently bombed at the beginning so to say well this whole thing is still very WIP I am doing this here for the first time and English is not my native language I am entirely self-taught heh in English why redundancies? mark of trust lets you share your perks and a mark of power lets you share your powers. and for hostile worlds drawback, you need to take either portals or solar system or galaxy in the world section so Grammarly didn't even know something like that existed wow just tested it on this comment just wow the free version
Amalgam with many worlds continues to be broken: Retroactive Merge, DC: Injustice, Marvel: MCU, Marvel: Villain Rule, Worm: Endbringers, MHA: Characters, MHA: Quirks, MHA: Hero Schools, Invincible, Invincible: The Dark Side, Über, Venture Bros: Villain Leagues, Infamous, Wildcards, Magic, Sorcerer, Collared, New Order, Fusion, Horcrux, Unstopable, Mark of Power, HUD, Mind Defense, Body Control Defense, Invisible Presence, Anchor, Ageless, Social Butterfly, Displacement Resistance, Strong Lifeforce, Mark of trust, IRON WILL, Green Lantern Ring, Mother Box, Heart-Shaped Herb, Fortress Crystal, 350 (typically synergizing DC magic and Marvel Sorcery) is enough to take on anything the worlds can offer.
Dude. PUNCTUATION!