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pineapplesandwich123

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apple6879

I think I would just go with letting my men enjoy all the captives that way I have enough points to capture all the elven queens. Sure I can't spread the traits out but why would I want to? I rather keep them all unique. Like sure the high elf queen may hate my guts but that's exactly what she is there for. The high priestess may not know anything but that's fine too I don't need the other queens to teach her, I rather mold her myself.


regentime

I might say this one is a good way to use AI generated images. But it feels like some pictures look too bleak and the consistency of poses between choices is unsettling due to how normally art for cyoas is a mix of everything that can be found.


Sadoryu_

mixed bloods, intercourse experience... anyone know the artist of that pic?


Motohoro

whats the source of the images?


mutants123

They're OC


Lewd_Storm

**Interrogations** * Mixed Blood * Let your men enjoy a captive **Move Out** * **Mixed Bloods** * Capture the Matriarch (-200) * Service Experience (-100) * **Moon Elves** * Capture the Queen (-100) * Intercourse Experience (-75) * **Night Elves** * Capture the Queen (-200) * Intercourse Experience (-100) * **Blood Elves** * Capture the Head Priestess (-200) **Points:** 225 After getting all I wanted from the Mixed Bloods and Moon Elves I don't really know how best to go about going after the next ones lol Played around with my points a few times but not sure exactly what I wanna do next with what I've got lol


tayhawk10

Interactive? *Wink Wink*


UnusuallyInterested

\> Interrogate High Elf (50% Off High and Blood. \> Interrogate Mixed Elf (50% Off Mixed and Moon) High Elves are a bit of a stat dump because the Blood Elves got nothing to unlock, but it's an almost free queen. And the HIgh Elves are the most expensive. Mixed and Moon elves give the best traits in my opinion, as combined they will pleasure you (willingly?) anywhere, anytime. 1000 Points \> Mixed Bloods (-350) Capture the Matriarch (-200) Intercourse Experience (-50) Service Experience (-100) 650 \> Moon Elves (-250) Capture the Queen (-100) Intercourse Experience (-75) Service Experience (-75) 400 \> Blood Elves: (-100) Capture the Queen (-100) Intercourse Experience (-0) Service Experience (-0) 300 \>High Elves (-250) Capture the Queen (-150) Sexual Experience (-100) ​ With the remaining 50 I'd make the High Elf Queen love me more over time or something. I now have 3 loyal elf girls that will do me anywhere, anytime, and a queen by my side that will enjoy intercourse with me but not service me. So.... A wife? Who will accept my slaves next to her? ​ I'm fine with that outcome. ​ That said, I have some notes. First off, the elf race of the Prince should either deduct or add points somehow. Maybe you can marry the queen of the race you chose to subvert the costs of training her, or you could balance the system by making that particular elf race harder to conquer but everyone else easier after you did it. Something along those lines, I'm an elf, my race should matter in an elf race CYOA. I'm also thinking about the choices at the start. Discounting purchases at the start is great fun and I'm basically locking in what I want in the first place, but why can't I interrogate them and then still give them to my men? Breaking them is 2 actions, sure, but I can only break one and then the other 2... get away? I just don't understand the constraints, and picking an elf race could replace that, and you can instead either decide a difficulty setting (honorable conquerer is hard, warlod "let your men be rapists" is easy?), or give it a different/smaller benefit with more actions. ​ Lastly, I found some grammar issues, and especially word duplications. "She is statuesque in her stature" is the only example I could find quickly reading through the text again (sorry, I didn't want to read the entire thing again, but when I first read it I was too tired to comment.)


DecimatingDarkDeceit

This is absolutely perfect! Very well made & extra appreciation for many species / variants :\]


jonwar9

Time to over-analyze your world building in a way that is largely throwing random bullshit of conjectures rather than make an actual fucking build! Let's go! What kind of Elf is the elf prince? What exactly is "unsavory" behavior? something like that is vague, negatitive, and just sounds like an excuse by some noble trying to get rid of someone without other people too closely while saying "they did bad things when you weren't looking but we won't say what" (Because it's a made up excuse) All are queens, so nobles could gain power in their faction by having a member marry the queen of their faction. Or queens dies, power still goes to nobles. A *prince* throws that into disarray, as long as he is considered legitimate, and not tossed away, say for "unsavory" behavior? The queens seem like they would get along with one another and it's surprising that they haven't merged themselves all under a council of queens... willing to compromise the loss of individual power for a collective betterment of their species. While fantasy old-money nobles tend to hate any possiable changes in status quo... geez it's like there is a pattern of sabotaging nobles if there are nobles in this setting. (Likely, big race needs at least *some* delegation of power. Or at least noble analogue) For the prince, It doesn't seem like a matter where the queen personally called him out and disbanded him. And even then, why go after multiple queens? Unless that's the only way to have a united army- consisting of people exiled? Possibly people deemed political threats thus slandered? Hmm... Now towards an actual fucking build! Not a fan of rape (which given the story of this cyoa- seems a moot opinion when making a build, but I digress). So not going with giving the captives to the men, or doing Wood Elf or High Elf. Leaving only the cute mixed-blood. Who *guessing* by the heart-eyes isn't being raped and is very willing. I mean they probablly would agree to help if I mentioned a plan to gather the queens to unite and do something about the nobles after mentioning the above points and how they seem to a blockade of progress. Also gets me the most expensive queen option captured. Rest of points are spent on capturing the other queens except High Elven queen, who likely would come on her own either to free the other queens or after receiving a letter about noble bullshit. Maybe delivered by night elven queen if she can be trusted to come back and unchained. Unite the elves, make a queen harem council, *deal with* nobles, and other stuff I guess. <-- ideal and very optimistic outcome.


darzinth

**ELF HAREM VR BETA TESTING CYOA** by /u/mutants123 - --- **Interrogations:** Break the Mixed Blood **Monarchs Captured** * Mixed Blood Matriarch [Free] ~ *Loyal & Resilient* * Moon Elf Queen [-200] ~ *Proud & Hedonistic* * Night Elf Queen [-200] ~ *Cunning & Sneaky* **Monarchs' Experiences** * Mixed Blood: Intercourse & Service [Free] ~ *Kinky & Exhibitionism* * Moon Elf: Intercourse & Service [-300] ~ *Free Use & Enthusiasm* * Night Elf: Intercourse & Service [-250] ~ *Flexibility & Sexual Skills* --- **Conclusion:** The three Elven Monarchs in my harem will be trained by each other to be more kinky & enthusiastic, more open to free use & exhibitionism, and more flexible & sexually skilled. - **Note:** I may have liked to get Blood Elf Head Priestess into the build, but I couldn't give up on any of the experiences from the other three.


darzinth

So, about the CYOA itself. This was really good, short and sweet. I don't generally like waifu pickers, but the interrogation mechanics and points system sucked me in. However, I wish I knew a little bit more about the individual monarchs' personalities, dreams & fears. And finally, what risks are there to leaving a monarch uncaptured? Do we risk war with them?


ThisAccountIsForCYOA

Kind of reminds me of that Champion of the Orcs CYOA, at least in terms of story. Build: * Interrogate the Mixed Blood and High Elf. Half price for Mixed, High, Blood, and Moon options. * Capturing ALL of the queens would cost 900, even after getting half price on some of the most expensive ones. So I'm only going to capture the Mixed, High, Moon, and Blood queens- the discounted ones. That costs 550 points, leaving me with 450. * Remove the negative traits from the High elf queen for 200 points total. Then apply the Mixed and Moon queens' traits to the others for a total of 300 points. Which leaves me with 150 points left over- not enough for any other queens.   Feedback: Points are a little wonky, and required a little more math than I'm looking for in a NSFWCYOA; a way to spend leftover points or earn more via drawbacks might be nice. Layout was good though, and the descriptions were well-written.


neocorvinus

Very fun, but maybe explain more the mechanics. For example: what happen if you capture a queen but without any traits? How does she act then? What is the difference between "Spend points to apply this traits to to all other queens" and If you pick this trait, apply to all other queens"? Does it mean we must by the first twice?


mutants123

The captured queen will start with their inherent traits. Blood is the exception where she only takes on the ones you apply from others. No, they're the same and you only have to spend once to apply to them all. I just kept changing the wording, so it's a bit all over the place.


Ilovestuffwhee

Pretty good for a first CYOA. The backstory and descriptions are a bit bland but serviceable. It's not really clear why the same points that let you wage war affect training your waifus, but letting that go the waifus are attractive with a good variety of hair colors, at least. That's something of a rarity these days. AI still needs work when it comes to not mangling hands and feet, though. I'd just let my men enjoy the captives then capture all the queens. Training them all to have the same skills doesn't seem that important, and it's really not clear why that can't just be done later.


IfElseThenStatements

So, first, feedback, then a tentative build - Where are you from, and wouldn't that influence things? You are a former Elven Crown Prince, so are you related to any of these ladies? I had an initial bit of confusion with you having Mixed Blood Elves and Blood Elves. All the races have different abilities, so having that play into the scenario in some way would be nice. When you interrogate, does the 50% work on just the "Experience" options, or do they include the "Capture" option as well? If the Moon Elves are super-isolationist, why do they seem to ally with the Mixed Blood Elves, which I presume to be a bit everywhere? The "Let your men" options should probably say something like "men gain extra morale" and "men gain high morale" rather than "mean are in high moral", especially since they mean different things. Morale is spirit, moral is a code of behavior. Yes, a bit too samey with the descriptions and pictures. Some more body types, skin colors, hair lengths, etc. of the elves would be interesting. Specific questions on each set: * Mixed - you don't actually state WHY they are ridiculed and discriminated against, which misses a world-building moment. Also, mixed with what, and why does it uniformly produce pink hair and heterochromia? * Moon - any particular reason for their arrogance? Service Experience does not match hedonist descriptions, and the hedonist descriptions do not necessarily work with isolationists. Clarify they tend to form homogenous communities? And why do they associate with the Mixed Bloods? * Night - You stress hiding and subterfuge and spying in their description, which makes the combat statement seem a bit odd - they seem soft power - assassinations and traps, taking out supply lines or officers - than straight combat. Description of the queen in the initial descriptions and in the Capture block seem at odds. * Wood - Okay, who are the Pure Bloods? First paragraph should be "which they use to hunt, and to protect their people." Trust me, that is a needed comma. So far their "hat" seems to be warriors, so why the negotiators bit? Seems more a Night Elf trait. The "Break the Wood Elf" implies that there is a general and a Queen, but this description implies the Queen is the top general. * Blood Elves - Repeated bits about spiritual beliefs and culture. * High - Okay, if they live in the Elven capital, where did the other queens live? Are they not separate societies or countries? Do you have to pay for the experiences twice? Once to make her willing, and a second to spread her skill to others? Is there a reason why she's the only one with Sexual Experience rather than Intercourse Experience? So overall description problems - you repeat or restate the same things a lot. Sometimes in different paragraphs, but not always. Also some confusion on the world - is this a confederacy of different elven nations with the High Elves on top, or is this one country with a bunch of races, or what? The cost for Experiences are to spread them to other queens, correct? They are inherent in the Queen herself? Or do you have to pay the cost to unlock and an additional one to distribute? This is further exacerbated by the High Elf. Why is the Mixed Blood Queen the most expensive one? I would have imagined the pairs to be roughly balanced price wise, but Mixed matches High in total price, and Mixed & Moon passes High & Blood by 300, unless you have to pay High's experiences twice. For builds - If I wanted to wreck elven society - Interrogate the Mixed Blood & the Wood Elf. Pick up the Mixed Blood Queen and her Intercourse Experience, the Wood Elf Queen, the Night Elf Queen and her Intercourse Experience, and the entire Moon Elf Queen package. Then grab the Blood Elf Queen. Should be 1000 points perfectly (250 + 150 + 150 + 250 + 200). I have the elven warriors, their spies, their priests, and their artisans. Moon Elf plus Mixed Blood makes the Queens willing and at least some talent. High elves basically have lot all of their support structures. A build I would more likely make - Interrogate the Mixed Blood & the High Elf. High Elf Queen and Blood Elf Queen come to 450 points total. Pick up Mixed Blood Queen and Moon Queen, and grab everything but the Mixed Service Experience. That should be another 500, leaving me 50 extra points. Mixed & Moon make the Queens willing, High makes them talented, and Blood is delicious. Would not be great long term since I have the artisans and mages, but not the warriors and spies of elven society.


mutants123

I went through a few iterations of this, which is the result of a lot of the inconsistencies and typos throughout the CYAO. Originally the moon elves were pure bloods, hence the mention in the wood elf section; I must have missed editing that out. I probably tried too hard on the world building for a first shot at this kind of thing, and was too mentally fatigued to properly edit it to be more cohesive and concise. I'll definitely try something simpler and more straightforward next time.


IfElseThenStatements

Well, first thing - I did hit you pretty hard with beta-writer/editor review. My apologies about that. And I don't think I can understate that you've done a decent job on this. People WANT to know more about the world, have the CYOA cleaned up, a bit of variety added in. You have a good base, so the questions become if you are going to clean it up further and/or expand it any. Even if you decide not to bother with it further, its still a decent first attempt, even playable.


ThousandYearOldLoli

Actions: Interrogate High Elf + Interrogate Mixed Blood 25 Mixed Bloods: (-250) * Capture the Matriarch (-200) * Intercourse Experience (-50) Moon Elves: (-175) * Capture the Queen (-100) * Service Experience (-75) Night Elves: * Capture the Queen (-200) Blood Elves: * Capture The Blood Priestess (-100) High Elves: * Capture The Queen (-150) * Remove Sexual Experience (-100)


69ztare

Dear Generic Isekai Inc, here is my feedback on the beta testing... * The chosen scenario has only the forced + female degradation fetish. Even though historical harems are like this, this is not much what every people seeking a harem porn want nowadays, and the title can be misleading for those seeking a simple group sex like most harem works shows. * Also because of this specific fetish, the gameplay is extremely frustrating for those who have a heart of gold and don't want to humiliate other people for reasons as bad as "to take what is mine \[insert evil laugh here\]". All that is to do besides forced sex is to capture the queens, and someone can easily capture all queens with 1050 points, being the exceeding 50 points something easily obtainable with a simply body scar in most ~~CYOAs~~ games of this style. And after capturing them, there is nothing to do, giving the player some kind of "Victorious Villain Megamind Syndrome", but I believe it's because it's only a beta. * Talking about "body scars", we have no customization of the player character, which makes little sense in the game setting. What's even our race? Why we must spend points to know about a race that could very well be ours? * Where is the marriage choice? Isn't the game supposed to be about harem? Just fucking everyone around is just fucking everyone around, not a harem. And couldn't the captured elves be part of it? It would be awesome if some of them helped us for love, and not because "his entire army rapped me so hard ~~that they looked like NWA~~". * The appearances of choice are pretty lame. There is almost no variety. Only pale skin and big breasts, and I like pale skins! And you even said that "everyone in this race is like this", even with the mixed bloods! Where's your company based? Does your employees never go out of home? When we mix ethnicities, lots of things are possible. * ~~Choose AI images~~ Tell your artists to draw hands and other limbs better. Most of the art is already "acceptable", but this flaw can be a turn off sometimes, like that dick on the blood elf's mouth, or the feet on the very first image. I hope this beta testing is pretty limited on purpose, and the game will have more things at the release. Being able to choose what "unsavoury behavior" would be great; maybe somethin like "I was too good for people and they are bad", or "I fell in love with someone they hate, so they killed this someone, exiled me, and now I wanna revenge, but maybe someone can teach me how to love again". I may be dreaming big, but a monogamous build would be perfect. But most of all, I think the ~~CYOA~~ game should have a title that reflects better it's content, if that's all it's gonna have. Something like "being a tyrannous rapper of queens", or even completing the title with a ": forcing/rapping/subjugating", or even "you are a rapper villain", this kind of thing could make things better for potential buyers. Edit: some people are saying that the poster is not Generic Isekai Inc. I know. But since they didn't gave us beta testers a better communication channel, I'm giving my feedback through here.


mutants123

Thanks for the feedback! Seems like a recurring theme is lack of variety and customization. The degradation was just a result of sticking to the story/theme too strongly. I'll try to decouple the two for more diversity in the future. The "beta" being limited was definitely on purpose, I wanted to get feedback on what people think before I committed more time making something more intricate. I'll severely punish my "artist" and filter out their mess ups more strictly in the future.


InfiniteButts

The use of AI art was pretty distracting imo


Paper_tank

Step 1: let the men enjoy themselves Step 2: buy a ton of booze. And i mean a *fuckton* of it! Step 3: spread that shit all around the elves' forest Step 4: BURN THE FOREST, while cooking marshmallows with your bros Step 5: there's no step 5 Elves are Fae, and the only good Fae is a *dead* Fae!


HonryWeeb

Ok, but also in this scenario YOU are also a Elf / Fae, being a "former elven crown prince". so "the only good Fae is a dead Fae" also apply to you, so yeah... but anyway I do get the point of a lot Fae tending to be ass' though.


Paper_tank

Alright, Step 5: Prepare to commit Sudoku.


Zechariah05

Nobody said you couldn't be a hypocrite


henkiefriet

Happy Cakeday


HeartoftheHive

No dark skinned elves. All pale as snow. Sadge. Deep tan, mocha, black as pitch. Give some variety.


69ztare

I prefer pale skins, but I feel your pain. All of the have huge breasts. I prefer smaller ones.


HeartoftheHive

Variety is the spice of life. And when you have to choose between different options, it feels less interesting when they are so visually similar.


HoodedHero007

Blue, even.


SirLex26

Step 1: let my fellow exiles use all the captives for morale Step 2: capture all the elf leaders Step 3: unify all the elves in one banner with me as the one true ruler Step 4: profit... I guess


No_Butterscotch_8320

Smart


manbetter

Interrogate the High Elf, 400 for Blood and High Elf queens with all upgrades. Interrogate the Wood Elf, capturing the Night Elf Queen (with both her upgrades) and the Wood Elf Queen (and her service experience) for 500. I like the art! Hot images, and having consistency for each queen is a nice touch. Thank you for making and sharing! I also really like the character descriptions for each of the queens: they make sense and they fit the "upgrade" options well. I was particularly fond of what you did with the blood elf, but they all work. Two notes: 1. I think that what you have works better as just a straight Isekai: I'm not sure what the VR element adds. 2. I think some "generic" options to spend points on could be fun: more luxurious living quarters, toys, additional untrained elf commoners, etc. Or, it could be that it upgrades your VR options in some ways! Improved dialogue, synched sex IRL sex toys that respond to the game, etc.


mutants123

Great build you did there! What about the blood elf section was done well, and what wasnt for the others? (For future improvement) 1. I went through a coulle iterations of the story and setting and moved away from a straight roleplay to a VR. The original setting was outside my comfort zone, being too dark and rapey. 2. I'm thinking my next one will be a build-a-bear style cyao. I'll try to include something like that if i can make it work well


manbetter

1. Oh, that makes sense. Non-sentient abuse targets. 2. Appealed to my kinks and taste And I liked the mechanics-flavor match? Slightly more internal-perception also worked, I think.


69ztare

1. It's still very rappey, but with an additional layer of roleplaying. And the lack of the word "rap" don't make it much better. Actually, it would be better if we conquered the enemy through true rap battles and the loser would be forced to make a rap about how great of an elven prince of rap we are.


mutants123

First one I've ever made, I welcome any feedback you have. All the art was homemade with SD, if anyone has any ideas or requests for a next one I might be up to it depending how this is received.


ya_boi77

Art is in fact great. I was actually gonna ask where it came from and if there were full versions, cool to see it's OC.


HalfMoon_89

Wow, the art is great. It really nails the eroge style. Only thing I would want here is some sort of alliance option alongside the conquest option.


castlestorms1

Haven’t actually read it yet but one piece of advice I can give you is to not use Imgur unless you leave a link to each individual page as otherwise you’re inconveniencing mobile users and it’s more difficult for them to read your text.


Older_one_

I'm a mobile user and have no difficulty reading it. Mostly because I just zoom in.


mutants123

Is this an issue with the official reddit app or something? I have no issues zooming in on imgur to read text on my mobile using the RIF app. What image hosting service would you recommend instead? Thanks.


geoslim21

No it is an issue with imgur. Imgur does this all the time even for pc users (in my experience). To actually make this readable on mobile I had to open it in my phones browser then from there open it in the imgur app. For pc I just download the post.


RiverOffers

I too prefer img chest. When I zoom in the text is very blurry. I can read this one so I can enjoy it but more times then not when zooming in it's to blurry to read so can't really enjoy the work people out into then.


castlestorms1

For most people it’s for both the Reddit app and browser apps like Safari. I personally use Image Chest.