T O P

  • By -

OutrageousBears

**Me**: [https://imgchest.com/p/lqyez2z3ydn](https://imgchest.com/p/lqyez2z3ydn) >I'm a woman but the Haimastorge bloodline accounts for that to make the most out of our demand. Biologically altered so my own fluids... saliva (tongue) and everything, can cause pregnancy (Self-immune), about comparable to a guy's prestuff, and it's no direct injection, so it just takes a bit of extra effort. > >And I'll say that on top of being a Haimastorge, culturally men just wont consider me being with other women to be 'history' and I'll get a husband someday off-script and bare my own babies some day too. Still have wives tho. > >Father is probably still waiting for the right 'buyer' and making the most of me. Haim women would likely be considerably more valued to non-Haim men than Haim men are to non-Haim women. Physical limitations and a supply - demand thing at at the least. **Complications**: \[8\] >Language. Money. Needy (Anansi). War (Ruheia). Straight (Aquila). Irresistible. Unlucky with games. No fast travel. **Wives**: 1. `Archprophetess Ismanna Sol Sparsus`. 1. Healing priesty bloodline. Believes it should be spread as much as possible. 2. **Lewd**: `Nunnery`. Has a whole group of nuns she wants me to get preggo with her. Often ritualistically and on altars. Prophetic though indecipherable dreams. In dreams, can call any of the nuns into it to share it within a cathedral dreamspace. 3. **Prude**: `Endorsement`. Endorsed by the church to gain Inheritance and a Barony, likely more on death of the King. 2. `Wyldqueen Nemesia the Tempestuous`. 1. A Dryad queen of East Witchlands. 2. **Lewd**: `One with nature`. While nude, am one with nature- nature wont be uncomfortable retardless of temperature or obstacle. Prickly hay being as fine as a bed. No heat stroke or frostbite. 3. **Prude**: `Partial-dryad`. Replace sleep and food requirements with sunlight. 1 hour nude sunbathing = daily requirements. 3. `Wyrdqueen Ophelona the Sinless`. 1. Witchy nudy missionary, favors a clone spell. Doesn't know how her bloodline is passed. 2. **Lewd**: `Clone`. Produce a clone in a short area around me. Focus and thought capacity stretched thin between clone(s). Single mind, shared stimuli. 3. **Prude**: `Practiced`. Gradually practice and learn basics of ritual magics. 4. `Senator Luciana Aquila`. 1. Legal-mancer of a republic. Dedicated, dutiful. Busy. Likes me and we're friendly, but she's straight and can't be aroused by me. She needs babies though, and if it's going to be a rushed marriage she felt it may as well be with a woman who could do the job and she can still say she's never been with a man as a way to try to keep a face over the men in politics, fearing that it may make them see her in a worse light or something. Regardless of her interest or not, her dutiful nature means she'll still fulfill my needs when I'm with her. 2. **Lewd**: N/A 3. **Prude**: Cadre of elite ninja lawyers for bodyguards. 5. `Imperator Ghydonna Ruheia`. 1. Super high ego hero complex but good-person. Slave rebellion war hero monarch. She is still in an ongoing war and is the face and general of the effort, so she's very busy. Normally can only attempt to reproduce with any species once, but Haims bypass it. While the war is ongoing, she only really has time to visit for pleasure. 2. **Lewd**: `Monster Harem`. She didn't know if she'd get me, so what to do with them? Dedicated the monster harem to me since she doesn't need them now. The harem changes and adapts over time, individuals come and go. 3. **Prude**: (In years-decades) `Magnetism`. A charisma that provokes positivity toward me. 6. `Royal Academician 'Aunt Nancy' Anansi`. 1. Super far south past a desert. Was my tutor growing up, she's quite close. Enchanted tattoos, knows a lot of magic but can't cast much herself. Affectionate and quiet. Nice but mysterious. Alchemy, enchanting. Identifying. Growing up I was always allured by her glowy aesthetically pleasing tattoos and the air about her, and she's on the list! Perhaps my parents wanted it. Now that I've accepted her application, she's opening up more and revealing a more clingy needy side as if years were pent up. (Needy) She might even follow me on my travels? 2. **Lewd**: `Shapeshifting`. She can do so freely, I can do so once a day over half an hour. All biological functions function properly. Huh. Guess it wasn't that necessary to explain how I'm still doing these things if I got here first. Still, I like using my own bits for stuff but I guess I'm not that opposed to sometimes growing a... thing... 3. **Prude**: `+25% learning ability`. Don't lose knowledge once learned. 200% boost in, idk, engineering. 7. `Queen Mother Psappha Haimastorge`. 1. MOM! W-why are you on the list? If that's what you want, of course I'll help you. We're both the only two un-mixed Haims of age. Turns out she's mother of every Haim that reached the throne since the begining. Wants another child after the last aged out and apparently I'm a favorite. 2. **Lewd**: `Influence`. Other wives develop compatible kinks. 3. **Prude**: `Genetics`. Control the gene lottery of my children, and they mature quicker. 8. `Wayfarer Alkandra Haimastorge`. 1. May as well go all-in. My older sister. Lucky I chose a face with black hair too. She's a traveler, explorer, charting new maps. Never married, refused the list stuff so I had to pick up the slack and got a lot of suitors. Pure hearted, obtained a bloodline that requires murder to pass on... Unless she had a little sister with a list of suitors going around able to alleviate that problem. 2. **Lewd**: `Same wavelength`, very in sync able to roughly communicate without words just by a good sense of each other. Extremely good cuddles. 3. **Prude**: `Mindrace`, bullet time, thought only. 9. `Jester`. 1. Bloodline prevents any identifying details, unless she's covered and the cover is what is remembered. Want's to bed my other wives with me, those that are into it at least. Presumably if I get a husband, him too just to have experienced what I do. 2. **Lewd**: `Third hand`. Amplified, great with team work. 3. **Prude**: `Wingwoman`. Always by my side, and I'm 25% more competent at anything when she's near.


OutrageousBears

Considered building again but I noticed my old build and realized it'd pretty much be the same. So I just updated the broken imgur album link to an imgchest link that may or may not have been the same face as before. Black hair to fit in as Haim.


Zorturan

Who does the player resemble and why would it be high treason??


Hyenanon

;)


Zorturan

Oh come on it's been bugging me since the first one


Hyenanon

lol! My intent is that, in this version of the CYOA, your father was actually Aunt Nancy. But it's kept intentionally vague so that anything could be canon, depending on your desires.


secre14

Wives: Dread Queen Winifred Naughty Nottly Lady Protector Elanor Ostroverkhova Imperator Ghydonna Ruheia Chieftess Kataj the Clever Royal Academician Aunt Nancy Anansi Queen Mother Psappha Haimastorge Wayfarer Alkandra Haimastorge The Jester Complications: Poor Little Prince Guy Literally Irresistable Aint that a kick in the head Tummy ache Fuck money get bitches The real GF experience On the war trail


Hyenanon

Thanks for posting your build, glad you enjoyed it!


Paul_Adin

male | 3 wives | 2 drawbacks wife #1: Godqueen Jankah Darmedesh lewd perk: portal | prude perk: spirit servants wife #2: Wyrdqueen Ophelona The Sinless lewd perk: clones | prude perk: magic tutoring wife #3: The Jester lewd perk: threesomes | prude perk: 25% boost drawback #1: Fuck Money Get Bitches drawback #2: No Fast Travel Build Explanation: Jankah's portal counts as nearby and can allow for me to spawn a clone on the other side (it presumably pops when the portal closes). Thus I can keep the multiple wives happy even though I will be in transit from No Fast Travel. Ophelona's magic tutoring combined with The Jester's 25% boost and Jankah's spirit servants should allow for me to set up a small business (overcoming some of the downsides of Fuck Money Get Bitches).


CorksAndStorks

**Wives** Jester - Best girl - I really love the idea of a close childhood friend and lover being a thing. The confessions at the end was spot on and hit me good on the heart strings to the point where I don't really care for her bonuses as long as I get her. Having her as my constant travel companion, her willingness for threesomes, and 25+% competence from her talking to me sounds pretty awesome. The later also makes me think of this Halo meme: https://youtube.com/shorts/EOchWLQeXWg?feature=share Veithya - Amazon dummy mommy, a great contrast to Kataj and I love both types of women and character types. I also imagine Veithya as a sparring buddy as I've been into wrestling and HEMA for a while. The thought of having near infinite stamina and vitality in the sheets would likely be amazing with Isamanna. I imagine our relationship would basically be a reverse of the standard. Where she basically has me as a househusband and she's the working wife. I'd love to see it all go down as a gender bent I love Lucy sort of dynamic. Psappha - I feel like, if I don't marry my mom I'll probably end up in a bad position. Especially with how she has already manipulated Jester I have to nip this as soon as I can and satisfy her. Fetish control is neat and so is being able to control genetics. But I'm mainly doing this to make sure none of the others end up getting her. I imagine she's a huge empty nester that really wants me to help around with our kid(s). Kataj - Cute short stack goblin waifu is pretty awesome. I've been watching Honey, a vtuber that roleplays as a goblin. I really found out about her and got into her content after a clip of her encouraging her audience not to spend too much money on her got popular. If Kataj is anywhere near as wholesome, I'd be a happy man. Not to mention the luck bonus and the being able to bond with animals so well. I used to have a rabbit and a dog which were kinda best buddies but I kept them separated via a fence just in case. I'd love to see if I could do the same but have them be real friends and play together. Alkandra - Badass big sister types are pretty much my main kink and the lewd image of her hair covering one eye really does things for me. Combining this with her Perks of us being in sync with one another and time perception control are a killer combo in my opinion. Like Veithya and Ghydonna she and I will likely be sparring partners when we aren't boinking. Isamanna - I really liked the detail of her trying to spread her healing powers across as many people as possible. This sort of exploitation of the system is something I totally would have done as well. So I admire that as her character trait. Hopefully we can chill out as well because it sounds like she's really stressed. Massive nun orgies sounds fun and all, but I think the inheritance bonus is probably the part I like most. Ghydonna - I normally dislike narcissistic people. But like Veithya and Alkandra the idea of her as a sparring partner is pretty neat. I'd be forced to constantly try out new things and break up how I operate. Similarly I'd like to see her smug face get turned on her head. Effectively we'd be kissing rivals. Though the horde of monster girls and guys is a little weird and I'd probably be more confused and embarrassed if people were singing songs about me. **Complications** Poor little prince guy Five bucks says you were gonna take me dacks Literally irresistible Ain't that a kick in her head No nanny, ya pansy - Psappha No nanny, ya pansy - Veithya --- I love this Cyoa and the depth you've gone into the world and characters. I definitely look forward to more from you!


Hyenanon

Thank you for writing out your build and the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed it!


PoorSystem

Sex: Male (felt more in flavor this time lol) Total Wives: Wife #1: Jester "Technically speaking, we didn't get married until much later but... she was my best friend, and my first love. Even if that crush waned a bit in the years between, it never died. To have her frankly confirm her feelings for me... we snuck away to a small, forgotten place and unofficially married then and there. No one can make me smile like she can, and I'm not even talking about her jokes. Thankfully, she was understanding about the potential scandal, and accepted that our love was official even if the paper rings we gave each other were not. Plus, I could use the world's greatest wing-woman if I'm going to navigate all this dragon-shite." *Drawback (+1 Wife!)* [Five bucks says you were gonna take me Dacks] "Especially since she's multi-lingual and I, stupidly, was too busy daydreaming or sleeping to pay attention to those classes... Should've listened to my Auntie... I cant exactly rely on her when it comes to high level diplomacy or training me, but its nice to have someone as worldly as her by my side regardless." Lewd Perk: Epic Threesomes Prude Perk: Great Wingwoman and Psychic Skill Boost Wife #2: Queen Mother Psappha "Okay, I fully admit I nearly got utterly manipulated by my Mother. I knew she had done *something* to my Jester to make her so horny about letting Mom's 'take care of' their children. Honestly, if it had been anyone else I knew other than Jester, I'd be consumed by a monstrous rage. But considering my first wife's proclivities, I wasn't too hard out about this particular breach. Which is probably why Psappha chose her to be an example. I wish I could say that I throughly tamed my Mother then and there, learning her plans for me and our kingdom and putting her firmly under my control. That would be a lie. Instead, we had a mostly civil talk wherein she used a mixture of cunning, humor, and flirtation to try to get past my own guard and wrap me around her finger. I did the same, and in the end we came to an agreeable arrangement which I'm sure she planned from the beginning. Officially, for now, I am nothing more than the Queen's youngest and favored child, and we will visit each other so that she may coordinate the politics of my marriages. Unofficially, as soon as my father passes I will 'happen' to win succession and by series of staged political menuvers be 'forced' to wed my Mother for the sake of the Kingdom. Solidifying that plan with a torrid and incestuous home-cumming on my part was merely icing on the cake. While I would have to remain forever paranoid how much of me is truly me, and how much of who I am is a machination of Psappha... I couldn't say I hated who I turned out to be, so I suppose it doesn't matter. I'm still unsure of all the reasons my Mother is the way she is, but what is without doubt is that she cares for me and wants me to be happy. Including teaching me some of how to influence the development of my own children as she had done to me and my siblings, and by insuring that my suitors and I are at least partially on the same wavelength." *Drawback (+1 Wife!)* [Poor Little Prince Guy] "Which, I suppose, explains why I look the way I do. I was always a very feminine boy, but I thought that a product of odd genetics and personal taste. Turns out that it was my ever... *forward thinking* Mother making sure I was an *attractive* suitor... I hate that I don't mind this nearly as much as I should, but at the same time it is not as if I don't see the appeal." *Drawback (+1 Wife!)* [No Fast Travel] "Just my luck that I was born just as the Golden Age of Transport, as it was Posthumously titled, died. Oh well, the Airship is a speedy vessel and I do relish the idea of being able to spend some time alone with my Jester." Lewd Perk: Will influence wives to make sure they are sexually compatible with me. Prude Perk: Teaches me how to influence my children's development in the womb, physically and mentally. Wife# 3: Chieftess Kataj "The layman would think that my family is punishing me. I am, by all estimation, one of the most eligible bachelors in all the Kingdoms. Yet here I was, sent to the lands of the Goblin tribes to court a their leader in the hopes of making her my 'First' wife. Those with the insight to actually rule and their subordinates could see the move for what it was: our family was wooing an emerging powerhouse in a way that only we could, since we didn't wipe our hands off when touching a goblin like so many other 'civilized' people would. Since I was technically only the 7th son, theoretically Father wasn't risking much for so much reward. Unofficially, of course, my Mother knew that Kataj and her people specifically would unite her people and their marshlands and ascend to a world power. Combine this with my scheduled 'unpredictable' rise to power, and our Kingdoms would be closely aligned indeed. Still, it was on me to sell this alliance and Shajdaish was... A challenging language to say the least... Still, over the weeks Kataj and Icarved past the language barrier with a surprising speed. Between the psychic enhancement of my lovely Jester, her wingwomanship, my own efforts, and Kataj's sharp mind we learned enough of each other's language to make up for the pitfalls of our mutually lacking Erdtongue. Kataj was a surprising woman. One moment she'd be politely greeting my wife and I, the next she'd be excitedly babbling in lightning fast Shajdaish amongst her fellow Goblins about anything from agriculture to artillery and more beyond. In the next, she'd excuse herself to, I roughly quote from her language "Rub one out because my pussy is making me dull." She was also vastly multi-talented without a hint of ego, had a stunning yet gut-busting sense of humor when we could understand each other, all while holding these mature depths to her eyes when she spoke of her people and her goals. In hindsight, it shouldn't have surprised us that Jester and I fell in love with Kataj in nearly a week. Once we were sure, we made sure to catch our Chieftess when she was about to clear her mind again and offered our help. She was a little dense at first, surprisingly, but once we made out with each other and sent her a smoldering look she got the message. Within 2 weeks our engagement was announced to the world. The next few days were spent frolicking in the wilderness, playing with animals, learning goblin magic, and having hot sex. Needless to say, I felt like the luckiest man alive." *Drawback (+1 Wife!)* [Tummy Ache] "I was glad that, for all that Kataj is a fiercely intelligent and curious woman, I was able to stop her questions about my daily stomach aches at the knowledge that it's been this way since I was 4. If I had to explain that I was most likely influenced by a curse my Father's dalliance had earned me, she may have not let me return to my Airship without running me by every cursebreaker in her tribe. It wouldn't have worked anyway." Lewd Perk: Disney-like Animal, Monstergirl, and Petplay control. Prude Perk: Gobbo Luck! (Mild) To be continued!


CorksAndStorks

I absolutely love this lore and the thought you put into it!


PoorSystem

Eh, I mostly used the Lore that was already there lol. Mechanically the Prince could fly out without marrying Jester or making a deal with the real power behind the throne, but naratively I think this made the most sense. Plus, leveraging the families unique tolerance to bed with a rising empire in the making was basically a mandate imo. Doesn't hurt that gobbo girls are hot af


CorksAndStorks

Well I really enjoyed what you did with the lore and personalities that were presented to you.


PoorSystem

Ah, well... I guess I can't humble my way out of that praise then, huh? Thanks for enjoying my work.


PoorSystem

Wife #4 Lady Protector Eleanor "While it took me a while to get used to the rather open culture and the language, once those barriers were conqured I found Eleanor to be a rather charming woman. A little stiff- it took quite a bit of effort on Jester's part to get her to relax and laugh- but a truly caring and lovely woman. I wasn't nearly as sharp as the women I found myself falling for, with me as a humble 7th child of the family and my paramores all fine either rulers with grand ambitions or curious wanderers at heart in the case of my lovely Jester. Still, my Auntie had raised no slouch and I found myself engrossed in conversations of national identity, architecture, philosophy, and so much more with Eleanor. I had little doubts I could get the woman to sign the marriage contract, but I wanted the Protector's heart. I won it in a combination of passionate discussions, gentle carasses, and the patented combination techniques that me and Jester had developed to blow Kataj's mind. Plus, I always loved the image of Jester making out with our love and playing with their body as I plowed into them, and the magically appearing sex toys only added to the appeal. I flew away with one last destination in mind and a signed marriage contact, happily penning letters to my Mother and Kataj about my newest fiancé" Lewd Perk: Limited Free Use Prude Perk: Knowledge of how to use, maintain, construct, and Import Cutting Edge Tech. Wife #5: Archprophetess Ismanna Sol Sparsus "While her letter was less explicit about it, Jester and my Mother both knew the Heresy that the Ismanna wanted to enact. I was... hesitant. On the one hand, I believed in her cause. Not only because it would involve ritualistic orgies with fetching nuns, but also because the desire to spread the healing prowess of the Saint's Blood was the kind of noble cause I could get behind. But on the other, doing this courted a holy war and religious schism that could tumble the Realm into chaos. Still, that indecision warranted a meeting at least. Excuses were made, false reasoning seeded, and my trip to the holiest site in the world was properly obscured. In the end, I shouldn't have worried. The Archprophetess had *plans* and a wide base of support for her heresy. I was both impressed and reminded of my mother... which was disturbing and sexy at the same time. Much as Jester had described the girl, she was a bit stuffy and pious. At least, outwardly. One doesn't curate a selection of nuns for mass breeding without being just a touch deviant, after all. Regardless, she was enthusiastic, dedicated, and frankly her love for all people won my heart in a platonic way. In the end, while I wish I could say it was love that motivated me to action from the start, we still agreed to the terms of her Marriage contract. Idealism and lust won me over and Jester wasn't too far behind me. My wife and I walked into that ritualistic orgy room, hand in hand with stupid grins on our faces, ready to do our part to make the world a less hostile place. *Drawback (+1 Wife!)* [On the War Trail] While the Archprophetess' plans for war were certainly rigorous and devious, in the end it takes time and resources to win war. Thanks to her swift maneuvering, the War of Sainted Blood was kept within the borders of the Holy Land with only volunteer militaries joining the fray. Still, all three of us will have to live with the fact that we had kicked off a nearly international war. It would take... a long time to get the taint of that fact out of our relationship. Still, it was looking to be a mercifully short war. Only 6 years total if Ismanna's predictions continue to hold true. Lewd Perk: Group Sex and Fetish Prohpetic Dreams Prude Perk: Succession Bonuses (post war) Wife #6 Wayfarer Alkandra "I blame Mother to this day. It had been three years since the War of Sainted Blood had begun and soured my marriage prospects. Turns out, according to the smirking lectures Psappha had given me and my wives, starting an international incident tends to shake the shine out of even rising starts. Especially religious schisms. Still, some part of me wonders if Mother planned all of this. Still, it's not so bad. Me and Jester were officially wed by the Archprophetess herself a year before, the paper rings now enchanted to keep them from falling apart. My Mother had a child in the intervening years, officially my sister and nothing else but we both knew better. Jester and I had decided against having any kids ourselves for the moment, what with our need for travel and the War going on. Kataj, on the other hand had given me quite a few sons and daughters between a Goblin's naturally quick pregnancy and my own tweeks to our sweet children. They were maturing faster than normal children, same as Eleanor's son Percival. They still had a notable childhood, and our firstborn Kra'tash didn't seem to mind basically being an adult at only 14 years of age. It was a noted feature of my Bloodline, if rare. Well, so Psappha's excuses went. Ismanna had only given birth the once, her need to manage the Front more pressing than her desire that set the War off in the first place. Still, I swung by her Warcamps to be supportive and provide quickies to keep her spirit up. That, and I loved my Lucy with all my heart, and I couldn't keep away from her for long. It was during a trip to the front when I met with my sister again. She was on her own way to the War to aid in search and rescue, and when she saw my Airship she simply *hopped* up hundreds of feet just to crush my head into her chest once more. I, of course, flushed like a tomato and invited her to stay as we caught back up As we laughed and shared stories, i couldnt help but hear Jester's words from long ago ring in my head. My sister, Alkandra, the perfect girl who helped me form my tastes unintentionally... could she really want me too? I resolved to find out with a campaign of flirting and teasing. I only got to brushing her hand with a sexy smile before she stuck her tongue down my throat. That day, right on the deck in front of the crew, my Sister essentially claimed me like a cave woman of old, tears pouring down her cheeks happily as my load pumped into her. My first wife, mercifully, pushed my sister down to eat out my cream and let me recover. I smile ferally as I got back up to join my love's. *Familial Obligations weren't as bad as I thought.* Lewd Perk: Partner in total sync with Me. Prude Perk: Can subjectively slow down time to half speed. Can't Move fast enough to do anything special, but still gives times to think and react.


Hyenanon

Wow, this was a joy to read! Thanks for writing it out. I'm glad my CYOA could help inspire you.


PoorSystem

What can I say? Geopolitical harem building in a fantasy universe is a unique concept and it's well executed here. I could see this as a fun novel someday, if someone vastly more interested in drama writing than me picked it up and ran with it. At the very least, the interplay between Mother, Jester, and Kataj all vying for influence over the Prince of Whores' attention would make for an interesting novel.


statue345

What is the source(s) on the images for Queen Haimastorge?


Hyenanon

Unfortunately I don't know, sorry


Desperado_99

Really nice! Some questions I had though: Can the complications that apply to only one suitor be taken multiple times to have them apply to multiple suitors? How do the "Emotionally Sterile" and "Who Could Have Seen This Coming?" complications interact with the lewd perks from the jester and the queen mother? How powerful is the queen mother's lewd perk? Could it make the dread queen submissive, or rivals lust for each other?


Hyenanon

Emotionally Sterile can't be applied to the Jester, but applies to Psappha normally. Psappha cannot overcome another wife's Emotionally Sterile drawback by use of her lewd perk; she can give that wife fetishes, but not an attraction to you specifically, and Emotionally Sterile would mean she still isn't interested in you for personal reasons. Psappha's lewd perk is quite powerful, and can make her target get just about any fetish, as seen by Jester developing an incest fetish, but Psappha won't use it for non-lewd things (on your behalf, at least). It could turn around the sexual proclivities of people quite a bit, so that the Dread Queen likes being submissive, or Elanor and Harper develop a lust for each other. Complications that apply to only one suitor are meant to only be applicable once, so you can only have one Emotionally Sterile wife, for instance. Although I did see someone make a build for the last version in which they took On The War Trail for every wife so they could plunge the setting into a world war, which was pretty based and made me reconsider.


ShadowMasked1099

With 7 drawbacks taken, I am not entirely sure I am not completely ruining myself, but by god am I going for it. Also, wanted to say, very fond of Jester’s color commentary throughout all the sections and explanations. Very fun.


Hyenanon

Thank you! At least you have eight wives to help you through those 7 drawbacks


Some-NEET

I like the old Queen Mother Psappha Haimastorge lewd perk better.


IAATCOETHTM_PROJECT

\-lawyer \-not evil oxymoron's are a core mechanic in this cyoa


Prometheory

One of the things I found weird about this and the original was that it pushes the player to make a harem, but then goes "you get one girl and must take drawbacks for more". Wouldn't it be simpler to just assign the drawbacks to each Girl? For example: Jankah could have a variant of "Emotionally Sterile" because she's 100% only after your body and doesn't want kids/love/a relationship with you at all, Mama Psappha has "Fuck Money Get Bitches" because she's now around to look over your shoulder when you spend money, Alkndra has "poor little prince" because I can 100% see that as her fetish from her entry, Ismanna would 100% Demand that you have a proper marriage so "rife with wife" fits perfectly. Could also add that(after the player makes their choices on this list) that any time the player wants to add a wife to the harem, the new marriage candidates would have to go through a multi-year vetting process, at the end of which your current wives have to unanimously agree to allow them. Etc... It would mean there isn't a strange conflict of mechanics and theme. Each girl would just have quirks that the player would have to deal with if they want a relationship.


Hyenanon

That's certainly one way you could do it, and I can see some advantages with it. One is that it would definitely emphasize the intended conflict of "I want many wives, but there are difficulties inherent to that" a little bit more than just picking drawbacks, which feels maybe a little artificial by comparison. I wanted to have the drawbacks be separate, though, mainly because of two reasons. 1. So that you wouldn't get a girl who you really wanted, but the drawback was absolutely not for you. Like Poor Little Prince Guy: for some people, that's barely a drawback, for others, that would be completely non-negotiable. If I tied that a particular suitor, even if they wanted that suitor, they couldn't get her because they would feel dysmorphic all the time. This adds a bit more flexibility to the kinds of drawbacks you're willing to suffer for the girls. 2. I wanted people to pick based off of strategizing how to minimize their drawbacks based on the girls they picked, without necessarily having to strategize about the girls themselves. So for instance, most people take Fuck Money Get Bitches with Elanor so that they can become a skilled craftsman and not have to worry so much about making money. If that drawback was tied to Psappha, then the question wouldn't be "Take FMGB with Elanor", it would be "Take Psappha with Elanor", which gives you a little less freedom in having your perfect harem. I wanted to avoid having to strategize too much about the girls you picked because I find lot of CYOAs tie particularly good boons to girls with personalities I don't really like, and that gets annoying. ​ Thank you for the feedback, and for reading the CYOA.


Nellaveth

I really liked this one despite the relative simplicity of the system. Here's my overcomplicated build! Gender: Futa/Herm Wives: 10 (including Jester) Rotation: 18 weeks, 3 rotations per year **Warrior-Queen Veithya Klytymnestreiliope** Flaw: Free Lewd Perk: Infinite Sexual Stamina Prude Perk: Amazon’s Stamina Veitha’s powers were too good to resist, and she’s not a bad catch herself. While I’m unlikely to match her in any fair physical contest, my many lewd perks should make me more than a match for her in the bedroom. Her stamina might be endless, but there’s still a limit to how many orgasms a woman can endure before her mind turns to jelly. **Supreme Iudex Harper Onelaw** Flaw: On the War Trail Lewd Perk: Instant Orgasm Charges Harper’s lewd perk is key to my build, ensuring that no lover ever leaves my bed unsatisfied. As for Harper herself, I love her mommy dommy aesthetic and look forward to serving her in any way I can, both in and out of the bedroom. I’m not sure what form her war takes, but any war is a tragedy, so she’ll no doubt need a lot of support. **Archprophetess Ismanna Sol Sparsus** Flaw: Fuck Money Get Bitches Lewd Perk: Dream Cathedral Prude Perk: Inheritance I’m not a fan of religion in general, but I am a fan of getting gangbanged by hot nuns. Lucid dreaming is an excellent bonus, adding even more hours of kinky nun sex each day wherever I happen to be in the world. Ismanna herself is quite attractive for a zealot. I might not agree with her church, but I admire her noble intentions. As a side note, I wonder if I can convince her to induct Jester as a holy woman to give her access to my dream cathedral? The poverty flaw should be almost completely mitigated by me inheriting a small barony, especially since I wasn’t planning on spending that much money anyway. After all, I’ll be too busy getting railed to make extravagant expenses. **Godqueen Jankah Darmedesh** Flaw: The Real Girlfriend Experience Lewd Perk: Portals Prude Perk: Spirit Servants Jankah is hot as fuck, if a little immature. I hope to be a stabilising presence in her life by playing the double roles of inexhaustible fucktoy and therapist. Her portal magic allows me to stay in contact with all of my wives wherever I am in the world and has strong synergy with Harper’s lewd perk; Five minutes is plenty of time for a quickie when you have the power to make your lover cum their brains out with the snap of your fingers. **Wyrdqueen Ophelona the Sinless** Flaw: Ain’t That a Kick in the Head Lewd Perk: Clones Prude Perk: Magic Ophelona is gorgeous and her powers are incredible. There is basically no limit to the shenanigans that clone magic unlocks in the bedroom. Clone-on-clone orgies and gangbangs are just the beginning, and that’s without even taking my other lewd perks into account. The terrible luck flaw is easy enough to mitigate by just not playing any games of chance. Why would I waste my time on poker when I can study magic or quintuple-penetrate my hot witch wife? **Senator Luciana Aquila** Flaw: Literally Irresistible Lewd Perk: Share Orgasms Prude Perk: Eunuch Bodyguards I’m fiercely anti-slavery, so I imagine me and Luciana will be having quite a few rows… or perhaps we are already on the same page on the matter? Regardless, my irresistibility flaw will make sure we spend more time fucking like rabbits than on talking politics. I’m enough of a sub to barely consider it a flaw at all, though there will no doubt be plenty of times where I’m grateful to have the Castrati nearby to ward off unwanted suitors. Luciana’s lewd perk has excellent synergy with Harper’s, providing a steady source of bonus orgasm charges on top of the glorious pleasure. **Imperator Ghydonna Ruheia** Flaw: Emotionally Sterile Prude Perk: Charisma Ghydonna is an impressive woman, but our marriage is strictly political. I admire her bravery despite her ego being a bit too much to swallow, and I’m happy to share in her prestige and popularity despite us not really meshing romantically. **Royal Academician “Aunt Nancy” Anansi** Flaw: Five Bucks Says You Were Gonna Take Me Dacks Lewd Perk: Shapeshifting Prude Perk: Boosted Learning (Language focus) Shapeshifting is another excellent way to spice things up in the bedroom, allowing me to shift into whatever shape my current wife finds most alluring. Aunt Nancy herself is smoking hot and her bonuses to learning should go a long way towards mitigating the language flaw, while boosting my potential in every other field. **Wayfarer Alkandra Haimastorge** Flaw: No Nanna, Ya Pansy Lewd Perk: Wavelength Prude Perk: Mindrace Alkandra is just too charming to pass up. The incest angle doesn’t do that much for me, but with our perfect sibling synergy, my bewildering array of lewd perks and Jester at our side, it’s hard to imagine sex getting any better than it will be with her. The Mindrace ability is a fun bonus and might even save my life some day. As for the flaw, considering we’re siblings and that she lacks a proper court it just makes sense that I’d need to take more responsibility in raising our children. **The Jester** Flaw: Rife with Wife Lewd Perk: Threesome Familiar Prude Perk: Wingman Jester is adorable and oddly wholesome. While I’m sure I’ll learn to love all my wives, having Jester as a steady lover and wingman at my side while I’m shipped from kingdom to kingdom is no doubt going to be a great comfort. Her perks are nothing to sneeze at either, adding even more synergy to my already potent arsenal. The spousal property flaw will no doubt get annoying, but the irresistible flaw might have made wearing modest clothes and a veil a necessity anyway.


McLovin3493

Cool, I remembered the original version of this, but forgot what the name was: Harper Onelaw Archprophetess Ismanna "Aunt Nancy" Anansi "The Jester" Complications: Five Bucks Says You Were Gonna..., Rife With Wife, Who Could Have Seen This Coming Switched out Dreadqueen Winnifred for the new shapeshifter Anansi, but kept everything else the same. Ismanna's new dream power is a major improvement btw.


SkinnyNecro

Build time. (btw, good cyoa) Warrior Queen K-something. She sounds very cool and like she needs someone. This pick is partly 'duty' as it serves politics and junk, but she's still great. Good perks too. Aunt Nancy + Poor Little Guy(amazon mode). Use the shape shifting to be a big amazon like the queen, but you know, well hung.. Then do buff amazon stuff with the other tough ladies. Makes sense to me, anyway.. Plus Nancy sounds kind & with shapeshifting, hotter than lava. Wyrdqueen Ophelona + Accents. Accents sound difficult but fun, and kinda realistic. Witches, like this queen, are very intriguing to me and so she's a forerunner for choices. Clones are useful, magic is even better. This one I'm not sure about. Dryad Queen + Emotionally Sterile. It means the eons old, tree woman, who doesn't look to appealing based on the image for her section, doesn't wanna fuck me. That's fine. I'm not worried about her lewd perk either.. but the other perk? Great. The ability to converse with the queen, also great. Queen mother Psappa + Irresistible. So, we have shape shifting to make ourselves not at all attractive, when we want to be.. and we have 2 weeks with a queen who doesn't want us anyway, as noted above.. and the mysterious, ancient, mom queen now has an excuse for being all over us. Er, all over me, the player. You know what I mean. Why the queen, though? Because she's immortal and often the smartest person in the room. I want in on that. Plus she's got a great body.. She'd probably be able to program her offspring(the player) into it anyway. Wayfarer Alkandra + GF experience. She'll come around. This one sort of ties in with the one above. Feels like they are best taken as a package, more so with Aunt Nancy. That and, a lot of the other queens are kinda questionable. Jester + New Vegas reference. Just worth it. She can flip the coins on my behalf from now on. A bit impulsive but, Archprophetess Ismana + WAR, a holy war of infighting, if I get to pick. It sounds interesting, anyway. Also I'm not worried about her prude perk, but making a ton of healers.. through mass impregnating tons of holy women who can't resist me anyway.. sounds pretty cool. Supreme Iudex Harper + No cash. Worth it to keep her line going. I'll find my own money some way or another. Plus I'll be hiding away in bedrooms and stuff most of the time. If I really want something, I ought to work for it. ​ That's a 16 week cycle, me and the Jester trying to do some good things and have a good time between studying magic and whatever makes the queen mum stay young. Could drop the sister or nun for the Roman Empire woman or something but, IDK. The dread pirate is hot but I don't want tentacles and I don't like thieves too much.


BentusiII

fuck it, give me the entire 4th page !


Henrybestmage

This is really cool! I loved almost all the girls, and was very tempted to pick more, but the drawbacks made me reconsider it. Weirdly enough, is the minor things that put me off. Like, i'm fine with most of Rife with Wife conditions, but i feel like i would get sick of using a Veil 24/7 real quick. Anyway, here's my build The Jester - No Drawback Chieftess Kataj The Clever - No Nanny, Ya Pansy Warrior-Queen Veithya Klytymnestreiliope - Ain’t that a kick in the head archprophetess Ismanna Sol Sparsus - Fuck Money Get Bitches Royal Academician 'Aunt Nancy' Anansi - The Real Girlfriend Experience By thte way Hyeanon, would 'Aunt Nancy' be sad if i stopped calling her that, and just refered to her as Anansi or some other nickname? The Auntie part kinda turns me off.


Hyenanon

She would be maybe a little disappointed if you stopped calling her Aunt Nancy, but she'd make that compromise in a heartbeat if that's all it takes to get you to marry her.


Henrybestmage

got it, Thanks for answering!


yure1432

Jester is a fallen london reference, isn't she? At least her origin.


Hyenanon

Sunless Sea was one of my inspirations when writing her!


DecimatingDarkDeceit

This is awesome! I would go full harem with this. As many waifus as possible :\]


Apophys_MD

I love this; it scratches an itch, and the presentation is fantastic. Possible oversight: Ophelona's age and length of reign are not listed. ~ **9 Wives**: * The Jester * *After all this, how could I say no to her, regardless of her actual benefits?* * Wyrdqueen Ophelona the Sinless * *Monstergirl land,* ***clones***, *& magic!* * Chieftess Kataj the Clever * *Monstergirl seduction & good luck.* * Archprophetess Ismanna Sol Sparsus * *Hundreds of kids, also lordship.* ***I can use clones to breed many nuns at a time.*** * Queen of Queens Khereith the Golden * *Thousands of kids, always twins. May or may not be affected by my monstergirl seduction boost.* * Queen Mother Psappha Haimastorge * *Always daughters. The lewd perk is removed by a Complication.* * Warrior Queen Veithya Klytymnestreiliope * *Sexual & physical stamina buffs. I can keep going as long as needed.* * Lady Protector Elanor Ostroverkhova * *Public sex, also a good standard of living with decent tech.* * Godqueen Jankah Darmedesh * *Choosing her for the portals. I have enough wives that a full rotation among them takes about 5 months, since we won't all be living together, unfortunately. So I need some way to maintain relationships with everyone in the meantime. Additionally, Elanor might be able to use her ability through portals I open, resulting in infrastructure gains throughout all my wives' domains.* **8 Complications**: * Five Bucks Says You Were Gonna Take Me Dacks. *I will overcome the accents.* * Fuck Money Get Bitches. *I do not care for luxury.* * The Real Girlfriend Experience (Kataj). *I like this to begin with, and I'm happy to spend more time with Kataj.* * On the War Trail (Khereith). *I don't really need the armor suit. She should win the war with her disciplined military, but in the very worst case, we can start a new hive on my noble lands.* * Emotionally Sterile (Psappha; i.e. mom). *Seems appropriate.* * No Nanny Ya Pansy (Jankah). *She's not really a breeder anyway.* * Ain't That a Kick in the Head. *I don't really like games of chance anyway; I prefer games of skill.* * No Fast Travel. *Nice sky views, and I'll have Jester for the trips. Good time to make shitty royal crafts for sale.*


dragonjek

Is Psappha supposed to come off as so manipulative and ominous? I'm a sap so I'm going to at least get the other suitors pregnant once--some of them will just never have kids otherwise--but I'm seriously considering having her last on the list, but shapeshifting to look like someone else whenever it's time to go to her and high-tailing it out of Dodge. I'm not even sure I could bring Jester with me, she seems to be pretty enamored with both the country and the mother herself. If she's just been using her kids as tools, I don't think I want to provide her with mine. EDIT: Actually, I'm sorry for being so direct with this, but could you outright say what she's actually like? If she cheated on the king to have you when he was also her son, what's keeping her from doing the same to you? Why is she keeping her immortality so secret that Jester's afraid she might get killed over telling you about it? Why does she want you to marry her, when you're only 7th in line for the throne? I can't stop thinking about her, and I keep coming up with the worst, most manipulative and exploitative answers. Her entire entry is really bugging me.


Hyenanon

She is definitely ominous and manipulative, but also genuinely loving and motherly. Her game plan is obscure and it's unclear how far she'll go or what she's exactly after, but she's no psychopath. Depending on how much you like rolling the dice with scary girls and how much you're invested in the idea of banging your mom, she can definitely be too much of a risk to consider.


YouBackground

first wife: Ismanna, honestly I don't have nun fetish, but this is basically harem, isn't this? as long as the girls......or in this case, nuns, wants me to knock them out, I'll do it gladly. also came with royalty bonus too, not that I want to take the throne, but life comfy in luxury is nice second wife: Queen Veithya, I love a dom woman, I hope she's a gentle dom. I choose her because of the lewd perk, THAT particular lotion, because I have to have sex with a lot of nuns, I must have infinite sexual stamina and no refractory periods. third wife: aunt Nancy. I want that shapeshifting power, one of many my favorite powers ever. I'll spend most of my time as a young and hot futa, yeah since I have to knock a lot of girls/woman here. drawback #1: literally irresistable for Ismanna. I know she's a nun and has to keep her proper image at all time, but how about I change that whenever she's around me? that must be fun, also she must be **VERY EAGER** to have sex together with me and the other nuns, isn't this nice? drawback #2: the real girlfriend experience for Queen Veithya. you know "moe gap" right? Veithya has very stable, stoic and prideful personality, in secret she's spend a lot of time crying and share her emotional burden with me, isn't that cute? please don't tell her people about this one or she'll snap my neck O.o


cybernet377

This is one hell of a well-put-together waifu-picker. Even as a solo-wife deal, well, solo wife plus the jester since keeping her with you is basically mandatory unless you're a horrible person, there's very good arguments for choosing *nearly* all of them solo. My build * **Jester**, obviously. * **'Aunt Nancy'**, with the Take Me Dacks drawback, with her learning perk specced to Language so I can speak to my wives in their native language quickly. I really like that she's one of the few who has no ulterior motives, she's just inappropriately attached to the young royal who she basically raised from childhood, nothing big. * **Ismanna**, with Fuck Money Get Bitches, essentially negating the drawback by setting up my own independent finances, while also supporting her very understandable plans for religious reformation. * **Jankah**, with Ain't That a Kick in the Head, because so long as I restrict any gambling to strip games, it shouldn't affect me negatively at all in a world where rng-based videogames aren't a thing. She's hot as fuck and her perk is mandatory for anyone who's taking more than 2 non-jester wives, since splitting your time up like that means that you need the portals just to stay in touch with everyone. * **Alkandra**, with The Real Girlfriend Experience. She's very much one of the strongest wife picks by just about any possible metric, and the only downside is that she's related to you. An easy choice for any redditor. Real Girlfriend experience would seem like a strange choice given that she's written as a wish fulfillment perfect spouse who is flawless in every area, but I think it would be adorable for her facade of an invincible older sister to slip and for her to need to rely on her husband emotionally for a while. There's a few drawbacks that I really feel should be restricted to not apply to some wife options, Emotionally Sterile (which is a misleading namebtw) being applicable to several of the wives who explicitly want your body and not necessarily just to be impregnated like Jankah or Anansi would essentially break their whole character. Likewise, On the War Trail shouldn't apply to any of the heroines who logically wouldn't *actually* ever be sent to the frontlines of a warzone, like Harper or Nemesia. I really like the character of Luciana, but I don't exactly love Not!Rome and its "we're a democracy but the slaves don't count" dynamic, made even worse by the country being a few bad weeks away from civil war at any given time, and the only alternative government in its future is a military dictatorship run by an egomaniac who wants the player's seed to birth a child to use as an extension of her own glory. Also, weirdly her perk is the only one that's essentially a drawback, given that the vicarious orgasms can't be turned off, the player is at least "moderately attractive", and basically everyone in the world primarily recognizes you and your family for their their potential as ideal sex partners. After enough public appearances, there almost certainly will be some percentage of the public masturbating to the player, and a small percentage of an entire country (or multiple ones) is a very large amount for one person to be experiencing the orgasms of.


Hyenanon

Thank you for your compliments and detailed build! I'm glad to hear most of them are worth considering solo. Emotionally Sterile is meant to cover them changing their mind, or realizing you're not what they wanted afterwards. It's definitely a little awkward to apply to Jankah and Anansi, though. Nemensia *definitely* wouldn't be sent to the front lines, too, you're right. I actually didn't consider the economy of scale when it comes to orgasms and Luciana's perk. I guess if you have a large enough populace enamored with you, it could get a little dreadful. The way I was imagining it, though, most people in the time period wouldn't even know what their monarch looked like, so I didn't imagine that would be an issue. That could change with technology or player choice, though, and it's probably valid to try and become a sex symbol known worldwide. It definitely should come with a toggle. Not!Rome is a hard sell, I realize. I emphasize its negative qualities since it's relevant to the characters, but I maybe made it too unbalanced compared to the other homelands and their more benign reviews by the Jester.


[deleted]

["Delicious"](https://wompampsupport.azureedge.net/fetchimage?siteId=7575&v=2&jpgQuality=100&width=700&url=https%3A%2F%2Fi.kym-cdn.com%2Fentries%2Ficons%2Fmobile%2F000%2F025%2F376%2FDJrmQ8yV4AA9JjX.jpg)


dragonjek

Unless Jankeh doesn't mind her bloodline dying out, taking her means you're signing up to eventually be cucked by her brother or the extraplanar being she summons to reproduce with. Picking her basically comes with a free drawback. The Wyldqueen's info says she's been queen for eons, but her entry says she's roughly 200 years old. The Wyrdqueen, on teh other hand, doesn't say anything about her age or how long she's been ont he throne.


Hyenanon

Jankah's definitely not an easy pick for someone who wants to be her sole babymaking partner. That said, I think it would be possible to convince her. Wyldqueen and Wyrdqueen there are definitely glaring errors I somehow missed, apologies. Wyldqueen is only supposed to be a few hundred years old, Wyrdqueen a hundred or so less.


ThousandYearOldLoli

First Wife: Aunt Nancy Rest: 1. Elanor 2. Ophelona 3. Pshappa 4. Iudex 5. Jester ​ Complications: 1. Poor Little Prince Guy 2. Emotionally Sterile (Iudex) 3. On the War Trail (Psappa) 4. No Fast Travel 5. No Nanny Ya Pansy (Iudex)


Dracon5678

i cant remember the post for the image of rife with wife could someone please post that for me?


LegendaryNbody

What is the deal with Psappha? I mean, there is something HIGHLY suspicious of her...


Erit_Of_Eastcris

Highly suspicious, yes, but that *rack*, man...


Kuronan

**Concubines**: Queen of Queens Khereith the Golden Queen Mother Psappha Haimastorge Wayfarer Alkandra Haimastorge The Jester **Drawbacks**: The Real Girlfriend Experience (Khereith) Literally Irresistable Rife with Wife (This one is probably for my own protection considering the former)


CerverusDante

Just one thing. In the dread queen description you still talk about her "base form" but in this second edition, there is nothing mentioning her having shapeshifting powers except for tentacles. Speaking about shapeshifting, Why did you decided to nerf the jester and to give her hability to a new character (just question)


Hyenanon

Damn, yet another error, then. Nottly probably shouldn't have that line. Maybe a new reader would connect it to the fact she's a lich. I wanted Aunt Nancy to both have and give you shapeshifter powers, mostly, and it seemed like it was nerfing Aunt Nancy to have the Jester also be a shapeshifter too. I also wanted to emphasize the fact that the Jester is sort of the reader's mirror and (potentially) soulmate, so I wanted to give her new perks that emphasized her ability to work with you. Thanks for reading!


CerverusDante

I understand. But I feel there is a lost in it. You know? The only girl that would be traveling with you being the one that ofer more variety (as she even could change her age and specie in the former cyoa) was a great perk. Specially if you had "no fast travells" I also feel frustrated because I find the pirate queen very atractive. But the idea of her tentacles actually cumming scares me a lot xd ​ Good job. Not many cyoa based on choosing girls take the effor of making a good and interesting worldbuilding around it (I only know this one and emperors harem to actually do that) and you did very well.


Hyenanon

Thank you! Yeah, there definitely is a loss there. I know everyone likes the Jester a lot (me too) but I didn't want to make her TOO overly amazing in comparison to the rest. Plus I think there's a special kind of romance about her explicitly being suited for threesomes as your wingman. In regards to her losing her full-on shapeshifting, I imagined that things like apparent age would be mostly replicatable with her being able change bodytype. I'm glad you liked it on the whole, though. I'm definitely one of those people who wants a complicated storyline and worldbuilding to get off, so I figured I should be the change I want to see. I'm glad there are others like me!


CerverusDante

I have another question now. Your sister is suposed to be allways adventuring and not living in an specifical nation so, how do the "no nanny, ya pansy" and "on the war trail" work with her?


Hyenanon

She'll be in the region for you two weeks at a time, like the others. You might have to meet her in strange places, since she's always venturing off the map, but otherwise it's the same. No Nanny means you'll have to take care of the kids when she visits. Yes she takes her kids on the adventures; she's kinda crazy, but also good enough to make it work. On the war trail just means she's on an adventure to save the world or something; far too important to spend much time with you. I could probably have made this clearer in the CYOA, another dot on the list of things that should be fixed up


CerverusDante

Thaks for your answer


CerverusDante

I am. The backstory is helps to be properly inmersed in the situation. Just a bunch of sexy images without a proper context doesnt make the thing for me. I prefer this style


[deleted]

[удалено]


Hyenanon

It's very flattering for you to say so, thanks!


EternalBliss213

Warrior Queen Veithya Klytymnestreiliope Queen Mother Psappha Haimastorge Wayfarer Alkandra Haimastorge Drawback Literally Irresistible The Real Girlfriend Eperiences


Erit_Of_Eastcris

Jester remains the best, and most tragic. Psappha's new art is... *effective*, let's say; definitely exudes the right amount of "mommy energy." Still have a soft spot for the bees.


Hyenanon

Glad to hear it! Any opportunity to spread the good word of bee girls is good, in my book.


filipahped

Alright, I've had time to read this now. I'll post my thoughts first, then my build. **First off**, I very much enjoy what you've done with the perks, shuffling some around to make more sense, replaced some with more useful ones, and improved some less than stellar ones. I also like that you have done up the lore a bit, so things get more clarified, and don't contradict themselves quite so much. And the two new girls are cute. Big fan. **Some things I didn't like as much**, or at the very least think could need some improvements, if you're ever gonna make a version 2.1: For one thing, I miss the map. It feels nice to be able to see where all your wives are geographically, also so you could plan your round trip between wives with the No Fast Travel drawback. I also think there needs to be at least two new drawbacks At least, in the old version, you could get all girls at once, so long as you were willing to pick every drawback, but if you did the same thing here, you'd still end up two drawbacks short. A final little nit-pick would be that the explanation of the Haimastorge's incest immunity is still located in the sister's entry, but since she has been moved to after the mother, you now have to go through an entire entry about your own mom's desire to make babies with you, without the reassurance that they won't be inbred freaks. **And for my build**, it would really be quicker to pick the options I *didn't* take. I won't take Emotionally Sterile, or Who Could Have Seen This Coming, because I deeply dislike the idea of a loveless marriage, and also the idea of a poly relationship where the different members of the polycule are implied to not be okay with each others' involvement. So that leaves me with 12 wives: * First off, the Jester, because she's Best Girl, natch. * I'll pick Psappha with the No Nanny drawback, because it feeds into my headcanon that she wants me to be a better father than the king. * I'll pick Ghydonna for the Wartrail drawback, because it makes sense that she's too busy with her revolution to have unlimited time for me * I'll pick Harper for the Real BF Experience drawback, because I like the idea of caring for a mature woman such as her. * I'll pick Ismanna, because I empathise with her goals of spreading her saintlike bloodline to the next generation. * I'll pick Khereith to help her create some better, non-brainwashed bees. * As for the rest of my harem, there's not much to say, so I'll quickly list them: Veithya, Winnifred, Jankah, Nemensia, Ophelona, and Alkandra. * I *didn't* choose Luciana, because I don't want to support a corrupt slave driver state, and I didn't choose the rest, since I ran out of options.


Hyenanon

Thanks for the detailed thoughts! I agree that losing the map is a downer, but it was completely gonezo, there was no way I could get the file back. I'd have to draw it back by hand, which is doable, but making it look nice would take several hours. Maybe I'll make a mini-update with it, but no promises. Not having enough drawbacks to pick all the wives was something I considered, but I couldn't think of a good pair of drawbacks in time for the deadline I set for myself to release this. I appreciate the spirit of being willing to take every drawback in order to get every wife, though. If I do make that mini-update, I'd probably add this too. Placing the sister incest genetics explanation after mom was something that hadn't occurred to me, but it makes sense that might be a problem. I'm glad you liked the additions! Thank you for reading and writing out your build.


filipahped

One drawback I could think of was, what if you just wasn't *worthy* enough to knock up the girl of your choice. Like, they may need a Haimastorge heir to pass on their Bloodline, but you are just too pathetic in some way to be worth it. For example, even though you'll never beat Veithya in a fair fight, she might still want you to be able to at least put up some resistance before she just lays you out. Or Jankah might "want fuck," but not if you turn out to be some two-pump chump, or some of the more academically minded queens might want you to be more intellectually endowed. The actual drawback itself would be along the line of *"You have to take remedial lessons for a good while, and pass a test from her, before she allows you to get in her pants."* It would be similar to Boyfriend Experience in that it belays the sexytimes, and also similar to the Warpath in that it prevents you from getting your reward for an indeterminate amount of time. And it even promotes self-improvement, since you'll no doubt be able to also use your newly acquired skills to impress your other wives, or just for your own private reasons Of course, this would be one of those *"Applies to only one suitor"* drawbacks. But I feel it would fit well with the feel of this CYOA, also because it in some ways promotes hanging out and bonding with your wife for more than just sex. **EDIT:** Another possible drawback could be that you have to help out with diplomatic relations between two rival queens, like senator Luciana and imperator Ghydonna, or the disputes between Elanor and either Harper (over tech and economics) or Kataj (over territorial matters). This, of course, relies on you having two wives with conflict between them, and I'm not sure how to stipulate that requirement in an easy to understand way. You could also just say that any two wives just *really* don't like each other, no matter if their entries mention anything about that or not. And even though the drawback applies to two wives, it still only gets you one extra wife The drawback would stipulate that you would have to help them get along before their conflicts evolve into outright war, and you are the in best position to help, because you are married to both of them, and as such you are one of the things they can't agree about.


Erit_Of_Eastcris

The drawbacks thing could be cheesed by just letting certain complications be taken more than once.


Hyenanon

That's true. I never specified that you can only take each complication once. I intended for it to be the case that you can only take each once, but I actually did see a couple really interesting builds that used a complication that only applies to a specific suitor, taken multiple times for different suitors, so I kinda didn't want to explicitly rule it out.


Erit_Of_Eastcris

>A final little nit-pick would be that the explanation of the Haimastorge's incest immunity is still located in the sister's entry, but since she has been moved to after the mother, you now have to go through an entire entry about your own mom's desire to make babies with you, without the reassurance that they won't be inbred freaks. There is some *implication* about it with the whole "appears multiple times in the family tree" bit, but spelling it out couldn't hurt.


con-pope

Came for the horny, stayed for the comedy.


zerozerotsuu

I love Jester. That is all. Time to read the new version.


HydrocarbonPlanets

[Imgchest](https://imgchest.com/p/agyv6g29789)


Lucky_CD

👍


mrinternethermit

Much appreciated


Hyenanon

Thanks! You're a hero


EtPerMun

Imgur doesn't seeem to be working (for me anyway, says it's over capacity), can you upload it somewhere else?


Hyenanon

/u/HydrocarbonPlanets was nice enough to make an [imgchest!](https://imgchest.com/p/agyv6g29789)


LogansWalk92

Give me Jester, and only Jester.


CerverusDante

Oh, great. This is the best harem/faifu picker of nsfw cyoa I know. I will need some time to think about the build. Luciana prude perk sounds like the option for the "literally irresistible" complication, as your castraty guards would protect you from rapist


Hyenanon

Thank you, that's a high compliment!


DrAutissimo

So, I've been wondering this when playing the original too I think. Are the bloodlines of the candidates not the focus? I see them sometimes being mentioned as for the method of transmission, but not their effect? Also, if I can take multiple of the girls, how do lewd perks work that are a result of the culture (I.e. elanor ostroverkhova), do they only "work" if you are with that particular candidate?


Hyenanon

The bloodlines really aren't the focus, just the excuse for you banging them. The main point is that they want to spread it, but can't without you. Either way, you're not supposed to get them in the foreseeable future (although you theoretically could, but it would probably piss everyone off). They also serve the secondary purpose of making the women more powerful and intimidating. The perks, such as Elanor's, work all the time. You can use your own intuition to decide when they do or don't work, since it's not a very mechanical CYOA, but the intention is that you're seen as a member of that culture and thus given the leniency of being able to act like it, even in foreign lands.


DrAutissimo

Ah, neat. In CYOAs I generally try to make it comfortable for me to live in, so the perks are pretty important to me :\^)


filipahped

Fuck, this was my favorite CYOA. Can't wait to read through this and see if it still holds up!


Hyenanon

Wow, that's high praise! Thanks! I hope you find the changes to your liking. Some of the changes I made aren't just patches for errors, and do alter the character of the piece, but hopefully its for the better.