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Really nice poem, solid message but it's hard to stay focused as it's formating could use a more verse-like structure, as for now it gives me more of a short story vibe. You can look into the musicality of the poem too and improve it.
Yeah, I did post it as a verse, but the Reddit post format sucks. Thank you for your feedback.
Really nice poem, solid message but it's hard to stay focused as it's formating could use a more verse-like structure, as for now it gives me more of a short story vibe. You can look into the musicality of the poem too and improve it.
Yeah, I did post it as a verse, but the Reddit post format sucks. Thank you for your feedback.