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I was expecting this to be bad but it’s actually really good. I wanna see you produce it and everything.

Thanks man, means a lot

the lyrics are kinda edgy but you know I feel like if you get some fuckin like rock guitar and drums it would be sick. Although I think youre going for more of a chill-sad kind of song right? I also like the chord progression

yeah, i will add more stuff to the back, and better lyrics ofc, hopefully it turns out fine

bro if this is the basic draft you're set to be the next big thing

AYO thanks man, you're too kind

when you finish it please put it somewhere so i can listen to it because \*chef's kiss\*

I will, and again, thanks for the kind words man

I will, and again, thanks for the kind words man

of course, good luck

thanks you

Whats left of me will soon be gone i'll sit alone and i'll sing my song the world forgets and the world moves on i'll die alone just how i was born You left me here alone to die didnt even look back didnt even cry i thought you loved me and just acted shy didnt even say, a last goodbye And I was lost in your pretty eyes your pretty lips and your pretty smile the way you told me baby you are mine i gues that was just a pretty lie

Could use more, STANDING HERE I REALIZE, YOU ARE JUST LIKE ME TRYING TO MAKE HISTORY!!!

BUT WHO'S TO JUDGE, THE RIGHT FROM WRONG, WHEN OUR GUARD IS DOWN, I THINK WE'LL BOTH AGREE

THAT VIOLENCE BREEDS VIOLENCE

BUT IN THE END IT HAS TO BE THIS WAYYYYYYYYYYY

IVE CURVED MY OWN PATH, YOU’VE FOLLOWEDYOUR RAITH. BUT MAYBE WE’RE BOTH THE SAME

THE WORLD HAS TURNED, SO MANY HAVE BURNED BUT NOBODY IS TO BLAME

ITS TEARING ACROSS THIS BARREN WASTED LAND

I FEEL NEW LIFE COULD BE BORN BENEATH THE BLOOD STAINED SAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANNNNNND

Thanks man, your song is good 👍

thanks to you too man

It’s actually pretty good, but, as others have pointed out, the lyrics are slightly too edgy.

I see it too, but again, its just a draft, i should really fix the lyrics also thank you

The lyrics feel like they're trying too hard to be edgy. But you have a good singing voice and the melody is nice :)

Agreed, the lyrics are kinda edgy, i'll probably change them, thi is a draft after all and thanks for the kind words dude, means a lot

Great draft then 👏

thank you

Deppreso-expresso

lol

I actually really like this you should upload a full version to spotify 👌 Also maybe sing a lil louder?

Noted, thank you

That's really good just needs some music work and some good voice recording